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Chicago, Illinois[edit]

This article has gone through a previous round of peer review and several failed FACs. After attempting to address several issues relating to the previous FACs, I am wondering if there is anything that has to be done with this article so that it will succeed FAC if it were nominated again. PentawingTalk 01:55, 11 June 2006 (UTC)[]

  • Fix red links, convert "Related topics" lists to prose, eg. 1959 Pan American Games in Chicago, Arlington Park, Chicago Motor Speedway etc etc instead of a bulleted list. — Wackymacs 11:04, 11 June 2006 (UTC)[]
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  • Thanks, Andy t 18:04, 11 June 2006 (UTC)[]

Nicely done, a bit long though, some sections like sports can be made a bit shorter. Thanks Jaranda wat's sup 22:59, 13 June 2006 (UTC)[]

  • I have attempted to summarize some sections. Is there anything specific that is needed? PentawingTalk 02:02, 14 June 2006 (UTC)[]
  • Nice work- this has come a long way since the last four times I objected on its FACs. (The time before that, I nominated it.) I think the only remaining issue is that the use of inline citations starts to wane by the end of the article. I think it's sufficient, but some people might think that a near 60kb article should have more than 36 inlines. Overall, though, excellent work. RyanGerbil10 (Drop on in!) 03:37, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[]
Review
  1. Mos has to be followed (hyphens used as dashes)
  2. The climate table can be moved to the climate subarticle.
  3. text needs a copyedit to tighten the sentences
  4. during the younger Daley's administration have made world headlines – what sort of "world" headlines?
  5. =history= is choppy. Sentences needs to flow
  6. Beyond local elections, Chicago.. – entire para can be summarised into one sentence. Infact most of the section glosses over the fact that Chicago is a Democratic bastion. Can be summarised.
  7. In sites of interest, context needed for Navy Pier
  8. most respected -- according to who? (weasel word)

=Nichalp «Talk»= 13:06, 18 June 2006 (UTC)[]